I like the ideas living in your poem however I always halt when confronted with post-grammatical poetry (although e.e. cummings sometimes grabbed me and kept me).
That is just me... when grammatical rules are broken I try to decide why they have been broken and what the author was intending. And that process, for me, frequently permanently disrupts my enjoyment of the poem.
And, good for you for not being so constrained.
(I am fan of true feedback in these writing circles.)
And I like the ideas which you have incorporated and the conceptual way you have played with the prompts.
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He seems trapped there. Nicely done.
Trapped, indeed. Hope he gets loose of the loop. nice read.
short but perfect !
I want to hum along!
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http://torristravels.blogspot.com/2009/11/judge-for-iiiww.html
great read! stumbled by your blog via November mingle..and glad i did!
Short and very effective!
elbowing in, elbowing out
Trapped, for sure. Nice!
remiinds me of a continuous circle....
Hi Larry,
I am a week late in my 3WW reading.
I like the ideas living in your poem however I always halt when confronted with post-grammatical poetry (although e.e. cummings sometimes grabbed me and kept me).
That is just me... when grammatical rules are broken I try to decide why they have been broken and what the author was intending. And that process, for me, frequently permanently disrupts my enjoyment of the poem.
And, good for you for not being so constrained.
(I am fan of true feedback in these writing circles.)
And I like the ideas which you have incorporated and the conceptual way you have played with the prompts.
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